Wednesday, November 18, 2009

day 17 - Multitude

At the weekend the poetry was flowing!! but now I'm really struggling, I guess this is where I gave up on previous attempts to do a poem a day for a month. Just have to remind myself these are first drafts, something to work with later... oh well, here is today's effort.

Multitude

I forced them back on the tube
up escalators and along tunnels
popping out into a flood of humanity,
some with a purpose, marching over the bridge,
others loitering gazing at the river
taking photos, Big Ben at least
made an impression
‘I’ve seen it on Dr Who.’

I remember the years I lived in London
taking the tube each morning
the unbearable closeness of strangers,
some evenings I’d crack, jump off early
walk the last miles home
trying to shake off the crush, the madness.

2 comments:

  1. love the Dr. Who line! This is much stronger than you think! And I use the 80/20 rule for these poem a day things. If I can salvage 80% I've done MIRACLES!

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  2. Hi Jessie, thanks so much for all your comments and encouragement. I think it's much easier if the prompt makes something jump immediately to mind - if I'm srabbling about for a subject and a way to tie it in I'm in trouble!

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